The big hunt
One Easter
morning I was extremely excited because a few weeks ago I had hidden a giant Easter
egg for my little brother. I had hidden it in a really good place where I knew
where he wasn’t allowed to go.
I rushed
down to the basement, I got a ladder and climbed up to the top shelf and looked
but I couldn’t find the egg! WHAT AM I GOING TO DO? I searched everywhere but
it was nowhere to be seen.
I went in to
my living room and there was my little brother stuffing his face with the
chocolate egg…
I think my, not so little, brother would have done the same! Good punctuation boys, although a comma in your first sentence would improve it. Also can you think of a better word to replace 'really good'?
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