I went into
the garage and I was looking for my stash of toys, I careful reach with my hand
to get a Spongebob toy, suddenly I got stuck in the cupboard, I was banging on the door to get out. I was shouting out for my mum but she couldn’t hear me because she was down
stairs. But I remembed my brother was outside. I shouted “Bob! Bob! Then someone was there, I
could hear foot steps, it was my dad, he
put all his muscle to try and open it, but he needs the key . So he rushed down stairs
to get the key , it then got me out.
Oh Emmanuel, one of my greatest fears! Some good use of language and punctuation. What's missing the other side of Bob!? So glad your's had a happy ending. Well done. Mrs. Weeks
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