Riding slowly through
the foggy woods Emily saw a splodge of paint leading deep into the woods. She
decided to follow it.
Once the trail
stopped she gazed at a tall building with no windows or doors. Meanwhile her parents
were worried sick because they didn’t know where she was. Finally she had found
a gap. She was surprised that there were millions of paint and brushes. She got
to work but suddenly found a man laying dead.
“Aaaaaahhhhhhhhh!”
She shrieked.
Moving out of the
dark was the exact man in black but his eye was sewed up.
“Join us join us?“ They chanted but she refused.
Pushing her back onto the wall they bit her... she turned into one of them..
Eva,
ReplyDeleteI'm a little confused here - this doesn't quite match the prompt. I can see what you're trying to do. But I think you have made this a little bit too complicated and tried to squeeze too much into this.
Great speech marks, good use of connectives and ellipses!
Andrew
Team 100wc
Hay-on-Wye, Wales