One
terrifying day, I was sitting in bedroom doing homework, listening to my music
with my friend Kelly. When we suddenly heard a gut wrenching noise like someone
was screaming down a broken microphone. My friend and I pulled out the
earphones out of the socket when we suddenly jumped out of the chair like a
pair of terrified chicken shaking like mad.
“What is
going on?” shouted Kelly
“I have no
idea” screeched Jessica
All of the
sudden the door slung open as I walked towards it.
“Ahhh” we
both screamed
Then the noise suddenly stopped... “ahhhh...”
How scary girls! Great simile and starting a new line for speech. Next time make sure you punctuated before the closing speech mark.
ReplyDeleteTo Kelly and Jessica
ReplyDeleteGreat writing girls! You describe what is happening really well and provide details for your reader.
I am wondering whether "terrifying" is the right adjective to use to describe the day in first sentence. What do you think?
From Mrs Natusch
team 100WC
NZ