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Friday 7 March 2014

barney`s dead/hansel and gretal fell of the wall by mary


BARNEY`S DEAD

FOR OLDER CHILDREN

I LOVE YOU ,YOU LOVE ME, LETS GET TOGETHER AND KILL BARNEY WHITH A GREAT BIG KNIFE AND A BULLET TO HIS HEAD SORRY CHILDREN BARNEY`S DEAD

 

HANSEL AND GRETAL FELL OFF THE WALL

FOR YOUNGER CHILDREN

Hansel and Gretal sat on the wall, Hansel and Gretal had a great fall Hansel`s Dad, and Gretales Mum tried to put them together again .their body parts were wrong but they tried their best,but it just dident work . Maybe thats why they ran to the woods and found the candy house where they got eaten by the witch.......
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2 comments:

  1. Unknown8 March 2014 at 00:12

    A very scary account for older children Mary. Better use of apostrophes although you need one for Gretal's house. Remember capital letters for beginning of sentences. Also use higher level connectives e.g however instead of but.

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  2. Anonymous14 March 2014 at 02:27

    very interesting mary
    from Tina and Tanya

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