One stormy night
there was a little girl called Sabot and she went in the deep, dark woods. Then
all of a sudden a WHOOSHH came out of no-where and a evil witch came rushing
down and swiped her from the woods. The
next thing she knew she was in a huge house, she tried to escape but all the
door’s were looked and the witch came down the
colossal stair case and said
“what are you doing, trying to escape? “
“No!” she said
“good because I’m gonna put you in my big bad dungeon”“noooooo” she said The end
It definitely sounds like the end for Sabot, I wonder if she will manage to escape? A few pointers for improvement:
ReplyDeleteNo apostrophe for doors. Locked not looked. Capitals for the beginning of speech and always punctuate before the 99.