(The modern version)
Once upon a time there were 3 little pigs, called Will,
William and Wally. One day their mum asked them to fetch some wheat in town. But
there mum said “watch out for the big bad wolf he is very dangerous,” “we know
mother called the 3 pigs when they were just about to leave.
Suddenly, they heard a wailing noise it was a missile,
blasting through the sky, targeting at them the 3 pig rapidly ran. But they
weren’t fast enough so they sadly died...
THE END
A gruesome ending for the Pigs boys. I really liked your story, great use of adverbs.
ReplyDeleteHi Tareeq and Billy,
ReplyDeleteWell done for this story, you certainly made it different to the original story - I laughed at the idea of the pigs trying to outrun a missile!
I was very impressed by your use of time connectives in the story, as it really kept the pace going and showed the order that things happened in.
Be careful with your speech marks next time - you didn't close the speech marks after the pigs called "we know, mother", so I wasn't sure where their speech finished and the story itself carried on.
Keep up the good work!
Mr Hyde
Team 100WC
Willoughby, Lincolnshire, England