Dear Mum,
You might have realised that I’m not at
home I’m in a hot air balloon at the moment. I’m sorry I left home without you
knowing I am absolutely fine I’m not near home. I’m in Sydney in Australia
please don’t be mad. It is so gorgeous here at the minute I am above Sydney
Opera House it is remarkable. Looking down I was surprised to see the curves on
it and it’s surrounded by crystal white, shimmering water it looks like a kite.
Maybe I will take a picture of it.
Excellent descriptive language Tanya. Be careful with your writing as you often miss connectives to join your sentences. Occassionally you can use a semi colon, but I would like to see more connectives.
ReplyDeleteE.g. (I'm in Sydney but please don't be mad)
What a very creative and imaginative response to this week's 100 word challenge prompt. I really enjoyed reading this especially as I lived in Sydney for a time many years ago and I used to love to go walking down by the Opera House. Your piece brought back many memories. I love how you wrote the piece as a letter to your mum telling her not to be worried - as if a mum wouldn't be worried if their son or daughter disappeared off in a hot air balloon. You have used great imaginaton in this week's challenge - Well done.
ReplyDeleteMs O'Keeffe in Ireland (team 100wc)
Fantastic words. Reading this makes me wonder what will happen next. Well done I am interested what your mum would say.from kerry
ReplyDeleteDear Mum,
ReplyDeleteYou might have realised that I’m not at home I’m in a hot air balloon at the moment. I’m sorry I left home without you knowing I am absolutely fine I’m not near home. I’m in Sydney in Australia please don’t be angry. It is gorgeous here at the minute I am above Sydney Opera House it is remarkable. Looking down I was surprised to see the curves on it and it’s surrounded by crystal white, shimmering water it looks like a kite. Maybe I will take a picture of it.