Saturday 16th
May 2002
Dear Diary,
I’m lying limp, in my smelly bed, in a stuffy hospital and
it’s 11pm, but you don’t want to know that, you want to know how I got
there.
Zooming away from
the livid police I saw a red and yellow,
life saving, hot air balloon. I leaped in while launching the weights out of
the basket. I shot up in the air and looking down, I was surprised to see that
the police weren’t chasing after me. Gently swaying faraway, the loud sound of
helicopters filled the air. The balloon popped very loudly.
Fantastic account Heather, well done. Brilliant word choices including 'gently swaying'
ReplyDeleteI think your first paragraph should be how I got 'here' not 'there'.
hay heather I love you're vocabulary its amazing (livid,stuffy,zooming) keep it up from millie w
ReplyDeletewell done heather .In your 2nd paragraph I like the words ....swaying, zooming and
ReplyDeletelaunching! from Cydni
very goood! i loved the part when you where using good words to lighten the story up!!!
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