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Friday 11 October 2013

The massive balloon by Kelly


One bright, sunny day something appeared in the tranquil sky which seemed to be waving at the animals on the farm. The cows looked and they wondered what it could be. As the sheep were eating they also raised their heads in surprise to see what was going on.

 

All of a sudden it began to fall and landed with a bang! A small boy slowly crawled out of the basket and he started crying.  The animals were shocked to see something making a horrible noise in their field. All of them started to run away petrified!

3 comments:

  1. I hope the boy was ok Kelly. Great 100 WC entry and some excellent word choices (slowly crawled, tranquil, petrified)

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  2. Hannah team 100wc14 October 2013 at 15:22

    Hello, thank you for your 100wc entry. It was very imaginative and I liked how it was in the animals point of view. Well done.

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  3. Although you didn't use the prompt phrase in your 100WC, I thought your story was very well written Kelly. The ending made me laugh- I could picture those poor bemused animals wondering what on earth was going on. Good word choice, good punctuation and the story flowed well. Good work.

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