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Friday 7 February 2014

But ALL we COULD SEE was WATER! by Kelly,Kerry and Cydni

One freezing bitterly cold day I was walking slowly through the park when I saw Mr. Haylock sitting on a bench with his fish. When the tropical fish saw a pond they jumped in the water and dragged Mr Haylock in! SPLASSSSSSSHHHHHHH! Luckily his wife sprinted to rescue him. Before she knew it, however, the street started to flood. All I could hear was Mr.Haylock screaming,
“Help!”His fish were laughing with bubbles! I started to run and get everyone to tell them the news however he was already in the newspaper on the front cover.
I woke. It was a dream.


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6 comments:

  1. Anonymous7 February 2014 at 08:25

    well done excellent adverbs from cydni

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    1. Anonymous8 February 2014 at 13:05

      Good use connectives

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    2. Anonymous8 February 2014 at 13:06

      Good use of connectives from eman

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  2. Anonymous11 February 2014 at 11:35

    To make it better use better words than laughing screaming or dragged and discribe things more from jessica

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  3. Anonymous14 February 2014 at 02:01

    I LIKE YOUR STORY KELLY KERRY CYDNI

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  4. Anonymous15 February 2014 at 15:14

    Love the story girls

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