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Friday, 28 February 2014

The Mole machine! by Mayeda



One day a little boy went out in the garden. He shut the kitchen door with his newly made key. He placed it near a tree when suddenly the key disappeared! Well not really, it went down a hole, a mole hole. Now the little boy was very clever and thought of an idea straight away, but for this situation he couldn’t even think. So he sat next to the tree  and finally thought  of something.dig like a mole. So he dug. Pushing through the earth he found it! It was kind of dirty so he went home and cleand it

1 comment:

  1. Well done Mayeda, good description at the beginning with little and newly. Try to use more adjectives and adverbs. Excellent use of commas, well done.

    Just check you start every sentence with a capital and spelling of cleaned.

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