WAR OF THE WORLDS!
One glorious summer morning a transmission radio wave hit
NASA, just before they launched a rocket to the planet mars; it was no ordinary
radio wave they have ever seen! They tried to work it out but it was no use
they couldn’t do it but when a scientist came out side for a cigar when he saw
a weird air craft that hovered like a flying sawyer, I haven’t seen anything
like this in my whole interlaced life! It landed and these weird prawns come
out I wondered if we could make piece when will we find out?
Hi, James! You opened really well, creating suspense and leaving me wanting to read more. Did you make peace with the prawns, I wonder? Great work - next time though watch your punctuation. Commas where a pause is needed, full stops where a longer pause is needed. Thanks for sharing your story.
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