One rainy
day in London City, everyone was drenched through, because the rain was
hammering down. The River Thames barrier was shut due to the treat that Britain
was going to flood! Everyone was rushing to their houses, however some were
destroyed by the horrendous storm! Then more rain came, it wasn’t spitting it
down, it was pouring down! Search and rescue teams were out searching for
people who were stuck in the windy streets of London. Next came the colossal wave;
it destroyed London and the houses of Londeners the rescue team were trying to
save ... and all they could see is water...
Good story but this was about London. Britain would not be flooded if the barrier did not work. It would only be London.
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I love your story it makes me feel like I am there.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of commas Joseph and Emannuel.
From Georgina.
Good use of adjectives from emmanuel
ReplyDeleteWow! Super writing Jospeha and Emmanuel! I like how you have linked your writing to recent events and I love the twist at the end! The way that you have saved the prompt until last means that your writing is open-ended, creating a lot of tension.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget to read your work through to check for small errors in spelling or in tenses before your submit your work.
Thank you for entering the 100wc. Keep up the good work!
Mr Alderdice
Manchester, UK
Spelling: threat and londoners
ReplyDeleteCould you include paragraphs?