One grotty
day at the harbour an unlucky fortune teller decided to take to the open waters.
If he could then he would be a sea captain and sale around the glorious world.
When he did,
he got sucked into a whirl pool it was the weirdest whirl pool in the world.
When he woke up he was laying next a giant piece of glorious gold! After he
tried to get the gold, he saw a elephant but it wasn’t a normal elephant it was
the size of a lizard.
Lovely idea James, well done.
ReplyDeleteExclamation marks, commas and dashes could really improve these sentences James.
If he could, then he would be a sea captain and sale around the glorious world!
When he did, he got sucked into a whirl pool, it was the weirdest whirl pool in the world!
, he saw a elephant but it wasn't a normal elephant - it was the size of a lizard!