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Friday, 28 February 2014

Earthquake by James S

One spooky night in Tokyo, Japan a humongous earthquake shook the earth while a tsunami destroyed the biggest company in Tokyo! The earthquake had made a colossal crack in the mighty earth that lead down to the earth’s core. It forced a deadly toxin that shot through the earth’s crust that wiped out 5% of the earth’s population!
The devastation was horrible children came out side coffin up blood and having elegist to the toxins.           

3 comments:

  1. i like your font and style of writing

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  2. Great description James, Excellent punctuation as well. Good alliteration with colossal crack.

    Your final paragraph has a couple of spelling mistakes (coffin) coughing and (elegist) allergies?

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  3. James,
    I loved this 100WC. The idea behind was interesting, thought-provoking and original. You also used your 100 words effectively and description to add to your writing. Just be careful on typos. Emily, Team100

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