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Friday, 28 February 2014

Pushing through the grimy earth by Eva and Georgine

Pushing through the grimy earth, a fluffy little mole popped his head out.
 “Where is every-body?” He enquired.
“Why dear they’re at home asleep”answerd Mum.

Departing back into the earth he scouted around looking for slimy, juicy worms. Suddenly a gang of mole bullies came and pushed him into a rock, they took off with his scrumptious food. Staggering  back home, he told his mum. Sally his mum went to the bullies house, and beat them . The fluffy mole was now confident he left his home and went to be a cop. In the dirt
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  1. Unknown2 March 2014 at 08:47

    Well done girls, great description and use of speech. Just make sure you always punctuate before the 99. Your ending needs to be punctuated differently.

    Sally, his mum, went to the bullies house and beat them . The fluffy mole was now confident whenever he left his home and grew up to be a mole cop.

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