Hurry
up! lets go, they will find us. We have got to go before we get caught. Lets
run as fast as the wind to the biggest swamp in Neverland and on the way we
might meet Peter Pan but we need to be as quiet as a mouse. Suddenly, I saw
evil Kelly the worst supervillan in Neverland . I never thought I will bump
into again. I remember when we met in high-school and I dropped my class and
then you helped me by cleaning it up then we never saw eacthother again till that day but now look at us we are
both here crying like big babys.I MISS YOU FRIEND.
Well done Kerry, good punctuation and your story is clear. Excellent use of similes as well.
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Hi kerry this is carol from team100 I love you story but the best part was when you done a flashback and most of all I like your fantastic photo. Well done
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful drawing! You used some lovely similes in this 100WC Kerry; it really brought your story to life. Well done.
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the person dosent look that scary but good story line from kelly and jessica
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ReplyDeleteHurry up! lets go, they will find us. We have got to go before we get caught. Lets run as fast as the wind to the biggest swamp in Neverland and on the way we might meet Peter Pan but we need to be as quiet as a mouse. Suddenly, I saw evil Kelly the worst supervillan in Neverland . I never thought I will bump into again. I remember when we met in high-school and I dropped my class and then you helped me by cleaning it up then we never saw eacthother again till that day but now look at us we are both here crying like big babys.I MISS YOU FRIEND.
well done kerry by cydni
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