“Let’s go now”
They sprinted to their car that was
drenched in dirt, meanwhile the unknown figure appeared, the moonlight
glittering on his face.
“The rats are
falling into my trap” He crackled
(Back to the car)
Rattling with fear their engine had run out.
“Get out now!”he shrieked
Tumbling over twigs and stones they finally
made it out into the open. A thing floated to the ground
“You will be
slayed by the Slayer “he whispered
as the wind made his voice more quiet.Coming
out of nowhere was a slash then they were both dead.
“Good
job,” the mystery man whispered.
Well done Eva, a good balance of speech and narration. Make sure you always end sentences, including after speech, with a full stop.
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ReplyDelete“Let’s go now.”
They sprinted to their car that was drenched in dirt, meanwhile the unknown figure appeared, the moonlight glittering on his face.
“The rats are falling into my trap.” He crackled
(Back to the car)
Rattling with fear their engine had run out.
“Get out now!”he shrieked
Tumbling over twigs and stones they finally made it out into the open. A thing floated to the ground
“You will be slayed by the Slayer “he whispered
as the wind made his voice more quiet.Coming out of nowhere was a slash then they were both dead.
“Good jo.b,” the mystery man whispered.
make sure there is punctuation before you close your speech great work!
ReplyDeleteHi eva thats a great story really scary! but i don't really know who the charecter is . still a deliciously scary story .from jafna
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