One foggy
night I found an old treasure map hidden in the deep, dark loft. I was amazed
at the crumbly, old treasure map that was lying in the stacked high boxes. When
I picked it up there was a humongous x on the River Thames. The next day I went
to river Thames and I went in the heart of the river, I dived in the river,
suddenly I saw a glinting box I gently opened and WAM!! There was a beautiful
glint of treasure.
Great use of adjectives James and what a find! Think carefully about your punctuation of your second to last sentence.
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