Out of the dark emerged a shadowed figure cackling. Then a
beam of light shines across his face revealing a man with blood red eyes and
raven hair.
“Why are you here you filth!” Dave demanded his voice filled
with hatred.
“I’m here to eliminate
you from the face of the earth,” maliciously laughs the man.
“You’re wrong” yelled Amelia “we’ve stopped you once we’ll
stop you again!”
Unexpectedly,
a creature unknown to human kind, glided out of the shadows and into view.
Course grey hair smothered his hovering body extensive thin
hair wrapped around them; they couldn’t break free . . .
.JPG)
Some great word choices Heather and great description. Make sure questions end with question marks.
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting response to the prompt. Take care with the spelling of homonyms like coarse and course.
ReplyDeleteTake care with your tenses as it can get a little confusing.
I really like the creature you created, very imaginative.
great story heather , i really liked your drawing well done
ReplyDeletefrom Tanya
Hi heather i agree with the above please keep your tenses the same throutghout the story other than that great!!
ReplyDelete
ReplyDeleteThe Snatcher by Heather
Out of the dark emerged a shadowed figure cackling. Then a beam of light shined across his face revealing a man with blood red eyes and raven hair.
“Why are you here you filth?” Dave demanded his voice filled with hatred.
“I’m here to eliminate you from the face of the earth,” maliciously laughed the man.
“You’re wrong” yelled Amelia “we’ve stopped you once we’ll stop you again!”
Unexpectedly, a creature unknown to human kind, glided out of the shadows and into view.
Coarse grey hair smothered his hovering body extensive thin hair wrapped around them; they couldn’t break free . . .