One dark misty night, a shy nervous girl, trying to be
brave, went camping in the woods. It was
alright until she heard sounds like someone was calling her name
“Alex, Alex?”
She was frightened as she tried to sleep, then she heard,
“ALEX!”
She ignored it, hoping it would go away, however she
couldn’t as she feared something terrible would happen to her. Suddenly she
packed at a snail's pace. There it was again
“Alex come here!”
She was running as fast as she could ... in a flash she
was upside down in the water and that was the end of her!
This is a wonderfully creative story Tanya! I love all the detail you put into the first sentence. I wish it had a happier ending, but that is just my taste. I like happy endings. Keep up the great writing. Mrs. Politowski Team 100 WC
ReplyDeleteA spooky mini story Tanya, well done. Good use of commas to mark your complex sentences.
ReplyDeletehey tan tan love your writing keep up the good work wich i know you will because your working with me!!
ReplyDeleteOne dark misty night, a shy nervous girl, trying to be brave, went camping in the foggy woods. It was alright until she heard strange sounds like someone was calling her name
ReplyDelete“Alex, Alex?”
She was frightened as she tried to sleep, then she heard,
“ALEX!”
She ignored it, wishing it would go away, eventhough she couldn’t as she feared something terrible would happen to her. Suddenly she packed at a snail's pace. There it was again
“Alex come here!”
She was running as fast as she could ... in a flash she was upside down in the water and that was the end of her!