Down
the valley a school was celebrating Remembrance Day.
“Now children we are learning about Remembrance
“the Teacher exclaimed.
“But
miss their dead, and why would we want to learn about dead people” wined
William.
“Because
they died in honour” replied the Teacher
“Oh”
said William
While
the teacher was talking Sally spotted something glittering in the sun she
zipped outside.
“What’s
this? I better show it to my teacher” she whispered to herself
Once she got inside she showed her teacher.
“What’s
this?” Sally asked
“It’s
a poppy so you won’t forget R day.”
Good use of a new line for speech Eva. Next time make sure you put punctuation before the closing speech mark.
ReplyDeleteI love how you told your story through dialogue. some of my favorite stories are structured that way. Like the last person said, please remember to place a comma or end mark before your closing quotation marks.
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I love how you told your story through dialogue. some of my favorite stories are structured that way. Like the last person said, please remember to place a comma or end mark before your closing quotation marks.
ReplyDeleteRemembrance by Eva
ReplyDeleteDown the valley a school was celebrating Remembrance Day.
“Now children we are learning about Remembrance “the Teacher exclaimed.
“But miss their dead, and why would we want to learn about dead people” wined William.
“Because they died in honour” replied the Teacher
“Oh” said William
While the teacher was talking Sally spotted something glittering in the sun she zipped outside.
“What’s this? I better show it to my teacher” she whispered to herself
Once she got inside she showed her teacher.
“What’s this?” Sally asked
“It’s a poppy so you won’t forget R day.”