One
lovely day I was riding on my bike, suddenly I hit a bump and my wedding ring
fell into a pongy river. I tried to get it out but it was too far down. I tried
a giant magnet, but there was a platform of wood in the way but I knew I had to get it, my whole life depended on it. So I jumped in but I got stuck in the
platform. I could see my ring so I tried to yank my ring out of the platform. Suddenly I was free and I got my ring.
I'm pleased you managed to get your ring back Cydni. Good use of adjectives and accurate punctuation. Next time try to use different connectives as you have used 'suddenly' twice.
ReplyDeleteHi Cydni. Well done on completing this weeks 100WC. I like the idea of a giant magnet! Good work on using a range of adjectives. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi cydni i like your story but i think you use i to often other than that great !
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ReplyDeleteOne lovely day I was riding on my bike, suddenly I hit a bump and my wedding ring flew into a pongy river. I tried to get it out but it was too far down. I tried a giant magnet, but there was a platform of wood in the way but I knew I had to get it, my whole life depended on it. So I jumped in but I got stuck in the platform. I could see my ring so I tried to yank myself out of the platform. Suddenly I was free and I got my ring.