Slender slug is a cross between slender man and
a slug, it has 17 devil tails and it lives deep into the woods by a house. One
scary, terrifying night I was playing the Xbox with my friend Tina. I heard a
weird noise coming from outside, I jumped up and Tina questioned what was wrong
as I looked out of the window I saw a slender slug staring at me with grief
across his face. From being hurt from a graveyard because obviously he is dead
he can`t be alive but what if he is muttered Tina...
Excellent start and I love the 'grief across his face' sentence. The ending would be clearer if you used speech marks.
ReplyDeletewell done cydni from kerry
ReplyDeleteSlender slug is a cross between slender man and a dirty slug, it has 17 evil devil tails and it lives deep into the woods by a house. One scary, terrifying night I was playing the Xbox with my friend Tina. I heard a weird noise coming from outside, I jumped up and Tina questioned what was wrong as I looked out of the window I saw a slender slug staring at me with grief across his face. From being hurt from a graveyard because obviously he is dead" he can`t be alive but what if he is." muttered Tina...
ReplyDeleteSlender slug is cross between slender man and a slug, it has 17 devilish tails and it lives deep down in the woods beside a spooky house. One , terrifying night I was playing the Xbox with my amazing friend Tina. I heard a strange noise coming from outside, I jumped up in horror and Tina aksed what was wrong as I looked out of the old window I saw a slender slug staring angrily at me with grief across his face. From being brutaly killed from a graveyard because obviously he is dead he can`t be alive he muttered Tina...
ReplyDeletewell done cydni like your work from harry and jamie
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