After school Jamie and Emmanuel were at the skate park in Swanley.
An hour later Harry turned up and we all had a game of s.c.o.o.t. it was Jamie’s
set first and his set was a whip rewind
it was Harry’s turn to do the whip rewind and he failed it then it was Emmanuel’s turn and he bailed it.
His set was a 180 .... suddenly I heard a crack....
I loved reading this and can't wait to find out what the crack was. I like that you have used some interesting punctuation in your writing to make it more exciting. Next time could you change your middle sentences so you don't use 'it was' 3 times to make it even better?
ReplyDeleteGreat use of apostrophes for possession boys and well done for remembering capital letters and full stops. Maybe you could add some adjectives next time. (E.g. we all had a great game of super S.C.O.O.T!)
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ReplyDeleteWell done boys I read your story and I thought it was not good but fantastic.by kerry
ReplyDeleteI presume someone was hurt? Does set mean a sequence of skates? Let me know next week please. Mrs. Weeks
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ReplyDeleteA Day at the Skate Park by Harry, Jamie and Emmanuel
ReplyDeleteAfter school Jamie and Emmanuel were at the skate park in Swanley. An hour later Harry turned up and we all had a game of s.c.o.o.t. this was Jamie’s set first and his set was a whip rewind. Suddenly Harry’s turn to do the whip rewind and he failed it. Finally Emmanuel’s turn arrived and he bailed it! His set was a 180 .... suddenly I heard a crack....