There once
was a day when everything was calm and the world was at peace. Until something
crashed and made a big boom. What crashed was a bowl full of legs the legs were
bloody and stunk reel bad it had writing on the back which said if you press
the big red button the world would be at war the evil spirits will escape and
they will destroy you all. They looked around for the big red button and said
shame on you evil pot. They found the big red button they pushed and pushed and
pushed and until that day they will never see the light.
Great description Mary. Next time ensure you include commas to tell me when to pause when I read it.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary,
ReplyDeleteI liked your gory description of the legs. Thank goodness for the red button! Just make sure you really think carefully about using a range of punctuation to help your reader make more sense of the sentences.
Well done though.
Mrs Prior - Team 100WC
ReplyDeleteLeg of Doom by Mary
There once was a day when everything was calm and the world was at peace. Until something crashed and made a huge boom.
What crashed was a dark red bowl full of legs the legs were bloody and stunk really horrible. It had writing on the back which said if you press the big red button the world would be at war and evil spirits will escape and they will destroy you all.
They looked around for the big red button and said shame on you evil pot.
They found the big red button they pushed and pushed and pushed and until that day they will never see the light.