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Friday 20 September 2013

Joseph


I was cautiously creeping through the mysterious woods to try and find my lovely camp site, which I have been to many times before. It was pitch black; I did not know where I was going! I carried on travelling through the mysterious woods... I was terrified. Then out of nowhere a strange creature started chasing me! I sprinted down the woods; it was pitch black so I hoped I wouldn’t crash into a tree. I knew where I was now and I could hear the fast flowing river to my left. And then I saw a bright light . . .
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4 comments:

  1. Unknown21 September 2013 at 02:43

    Great use of punctuation... it forces us to read the first part quickly but then slow down when you are safely out of the woods. Great use of semi-colons as well.

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  2. Nicola (Team100WC)22 September 2013 at 08:39

    This is a very good 100WC Joseph. I really like how you have used the prompt as a cliffhanger ending. Your use of punctuation is excellent and the story is all the better for it. Very well done.

    Nicola (Team 100WC)

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  3. Anonymous3 October 2013 at 02:50

    This is great joseph i love how you created suspense and i can't wait to find out what happens next

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  4. Anonymous3 October 2013 at 02:52

    Great cliffhanger ending! Does the bright light mean you are going to be rescued, or does it spell even more trouble ahead? Read on to find out...

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