One
bright sunny Day I was in Poverest Park. When I suddenly saw a plant pot with
spooky legs wiggling around, it was called leg Eater. IT was last seen at 3pm.
So
please be warned keep out of site do not be caught it will break you into bits.
If you have food it will eat you and your children! Make shore your children do not go out on
there own over wise they might get eaten by the Leg Eater. I feel sorry for if
it is chasing you now while you are reading this...
Good punctuation Girls. Next time make sure you decide which genre you are going to write. You have started a story and have gone into a report.
ReplyDeleteHello Kerry and Kelly,
ReplyDeleteI agree with Mr Haylock, this started in one genre and finished in another - however, I thought the second part was really good. I like the idea of a report that ends with a warning!
Next time double check that you have used the correct spelling of the words that you use - for example, you put shore when I think you meant 'sure'.
Good work, girls!
Mrs Radd (TEAM100WC)
Hello Kerry and Kelly,
ReplyDeleteI agree with Mr Haylock, this started in one genre and finished in another - however, I thought the second part was really good. I like the idea of a report that ends with a warning!
Next time double check that you have used the correct spelling of the words that you use - for example, you put shore when I think you meant 'sure'.
Good work, girls!
Mrs Radd (TEAM100WC)
One bright sunny Day I was in Poverest Park. When I suddenly saw a plant pot with spooky legs wiggling around, it was called leg Eater. IT was last seen at 3pm in irland.
ReplyDeleteSo please be warned keep out of site do not be caught it will break you into bits. If you have food it will eat you and your children! Make sure your children do not go out on there own over wise they might get eaten by the Leg Eater. I feel sorry for you if it is chasing you now while you are reading this... by...