My fingers trembled vigorously; I was digging as fast as humanly
possible to hide my life’s work, concealed underground. After 5 minutes of
digging deeper into the cold, soled ground, I dropped my paperwork into the
pitch black hole just waiting for someone one to find me. Once I had ensured
that there my surroundings had no sign of human existence, I smothered the deep
cavern in the ground with dirt and stamped it down. As I walked away a hooded
man confronted me...
My eyelids batted to focus my swollen droopy eyes,
As they focused ... I saw a bright light shining on me.
Oh god.
Looks like you've been caught Tina! Excellent use of describing words. Think carefully about your word choices though, cavern sounds like a really deep hole - deeper than you dug in the story.
ReplyDeleteSuper piece of writing Tina, loved the fingers trembling vigorously.
ReplyDeleteWell done, keep it up. Each week these blogs are improving. Mrs Wheller
I like your story you have good words and good adverbs.from kerry
ReplyDeleteGreat story tina I like the fact that you explained it as droopy eyes and that you might be caught
ReplyDeleteOUTSTANDING! H.R
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My fingers trembled vigorously; I was digging as fast as humanly possible to hide my life’s work, concealed underground. After 5 minutes of digging deeper into the cold, soled ground, I dropped my paperwork into the pitch black ditch just waiting for someone one to find me. Once I had ensured that there my surroundings had no sign of human existence, I smothered the deep crater in the ground with dirt and stamped it down. As I walked away a hooded man confronted me...
My eyelids batted to focus my swollen droopy eyes, as they focused ... I saw a bright light shining on me.
Oh god.