Whilst I was
strolling through the woods, early one evening, I started to run because it was
getting dark. I needed to get home as my family were waiting for me.
In a flash I
tripped and fell in a pile of rough leaves, feeling like rocks. I tried to walk
but it was no use!
I felt
terrified. I tried to use my phone but as I fell it smashed in to tiny pieces. WHAT SHOULD I DO? All of a sudden a bright
light went over the top of me. I thought it was a plane but I was wrong...
Very mysterious ending Mason, I'm hoping it will be someone to help you. Great use of a question and much better punctuation.
ReplyDeleteLoved the opener - in a flash....Loved your ending leaving the reader wondering what was going to happen next. Well done Mrs Wheller
ReplyDeleteWhilst I was strolling through the woods, early one evening, I started to run because it was getting dark. I needed to get home as my family were waiting for me.
ReplyDeleteIn a flash I tripped and fell in a pile of rough leaves, feeling like rocks. I tried to walk but it was no use!
I felt terrified. I tried to use my phone but as I fell it smashed in to tiny pieces. WHAT SHOULD I DO? All of a sudden a bright light went over the top of me. I thought it was a plane but I was wrong...