The latest news... on Friday, 27th March everyone
was excited about the new arrival to Poverest park. The people looked in anticipation,
wondering what was going to appear. There was much discussion about their
ideas. At 11 o`clock the mayor`s car drove through the park and the crowd
cheered and clapped. The mayor, Thomas Jafrato, walked up to the statue that
was covered by a plain white sheet. What was underneath? Slowly the sheet fell
to the floor. People could be seen with their mouths open as legs appeared
being sucked in to a giant head! Suddenly the mayor was seen in the giant head.
Great build up to the shocking scene you see. Good use of allteration and the adverb slowly.
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ReplyDeleteWell, I must say I would have been surprised if a strange sculpture as in the prompt photo were unveiled. I was wondering what the mayor's reaction had been. I suspect he had some idea because, in your final sentence, you added the mayor was seen in the giant head. For the people of the town, I can imagine very mixed reactions. Well done. :)
The care you have taken with spelling and punctuation shows the reader you are a skilled writer. Your use of the prompt shows us you have creative ideas. Again, well done. :)
Have you taken the opportunity to visit the entries of students from other schools? It is interesting to see how others have approached the prompt. Don’t forget to leave them a comment if you do visit.
I hope you keep entering the 100WC. I suspect you have many stories to share.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
The latest news... on Friday, 27th March everyone was excited about the new arrival to Poverest park. The people looked in anticipation, wondering what was going to appear. There was much discussion about their ideas. At 11 o`clock the mayor`s car drove through the park and the crowd cheered and clapped. The mayor, Thomas Jafrato, walked up to the statue that was covered by a plain white sheet. What was underneath? Slowly the sheet fell to the floor. People could be seen with their mouths open as legs appeared being sucked in to a giant head! Suddenly the mayor was seen in the giant head.
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