One
day a family went to their cabin. The next day they found a creepy closet Suddenly,
I saw a leg monster, it was the most hairiest thing that I have ever seen. It jumped out like a rocket travelling up to Ka-pax.
Good description James. You have started talking in the third person (one day a family) and then changed to first person. (I) Always write in the same person.
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Good description James. You have started talking in the third person (one day a family) and then changed to first person. (I) Always write in the same person.
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