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Friday 27 September 2013

New Years Eve by Tina


On the night of New Years Eve, in the deadness of the night, the ghastly dreaded monster seeks a friend to haunt for life.

It searches in the forest, it searches in the wood, it searches in the places that you never thought it could.

When you’re tucked up in your bed

 Fast asleep at night it drags itself into your

Dreams and messes with your head.

You’re dreaming of a monster, you’re dreaming of the night, you dream that you’re dying fast and getting closer to the light.

Finally you wake up and you’re living with the dead.

5 comments:

  1. Excellent use of deliberate repetition and good adjectives.

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  2. Hello, thank you for your 100WC entry, I really enjoyed reading it and liked how you wrote it as a poem. You described what the monster did well but it would be nice for some descriptive language to describe what the monster looks like.

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  3. I loved the ending that tells you that your dead and the fact you wrote it in the form of a poem.

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  4. it was a very good poem
    from mary mac lairy

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  5. New Years Eve by Tina

    On the night of New Years Eve, in the deadness of the night, the ghastly dreaded monster seeks a friend to haunt for life.

    It searches in the forest, it searches in the wood, it searches in the places that you never thought it could.

    When you’re tucked up in your bed

    Fast asleep at night

    it drags itself into your dreams and messes with your head.

    You’re dreaming of a monster, you’re dreaming of the night, you dream that you’re dying fast and getting closer to the light.

    Finally you wake up and you’re living with the dead.

    in your dream you recall that the monster said

    evade me , suffer and see a hospital bed.

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