One Halloween night a young boy called Fred was out trick
or treating and he was lost in the deadly dark woods. All of a sudden he heard
a weird sound (whoop!)
He thought it was a Bigfoot, but out of nowhere it
appeared... it was an immense man eating creature! That could run 1000 mph .then
he saw a red head and then again (whoop!) then he ran for his life, 1 hour
later his back at his house, then outside the colossal creature appeared MUNCH!
A bit of the house was gone now it’s my turn ...
Great description boys and some good WOW words.
ReplyDeleteBe careful with his and he's (he's = he is)
I like the way you ended your writing, leaving the reader wondering what was going to happen next! You created a strong sense of suspense that kept the reader interested from beginning to end.
ReplyDeleteWas it difficult to write together? How did you agree what to write?
I would love to know what happened next, I wonder if this could become part of a longer story?
Nicola Richardson
100wc team
Amazing writing I like the suspence and begining try and use more adverbs. H.L.R
ReplyDeleteAmazing writing great suspence try and use more adverbs.H.R
ReplyDeleteHi! Joseph I loved it when you described how fast the man eating creature.Good use of punctuation Well Done!
ReplyDeletenice lovely work joseph and maison
ReplyDeleteOne Halloween night a young boy called Fred was out trick or treating and he was lost in the deadly dark woods. All of a sudden he heard a weird sound (whoop!)
ReplyDeleteHe thought it was a Bigfoot, but out of nowhere it appeared... it was an immense man eating creature! That could run 1000 mph .then he saw a red head and then again (whoop!) then he ran for his life, 1 hour later his back at his house, then outside the colossal creature apOne Halloween night a young boy called Fred was out trick or treating and he was lost in the deadly dark woods. All of a sudden he heard a weird sound (whoop!)
He thought it was a Bigfoot, but out of nowhere it appeared... it was an immense man eating creature! That could run 1000 mph .then he saw a red head and then again (whoop!) then he ran for his life, 1 hour later his back at his house, then outside the colossal creature appeared MUNCH! A bit of the house was gone now it’s my turn peared MUNCH! A bit of the house was gone now it’s my turn big fury beast