One sunny day
Barry and Garry marched to the shop to buy some cake mixture so they could make
some cakes. We sprinted to the shop next
door to buy some custard to place into the middle of the cake. We trotted back
home and started to bake our cake. Barry put it into the oven for one hour. All
of a sudden there was an explosion coming from the kitchen. We darted into the
kitchen to see the devastation and the custard tasted like rotten mustard. And
then Barry run into the kitchen ...
Great simile boys. Next time think carefully about which person you are writing in. Are you talking about Garry and Barry or yourselves (we, us etc)
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