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Friday 31 January 2014

zoo by Antoine

ONE COSY WINTER MORNING IT WAS A BOY NAMED TYLER’S BIRTHDAY .HE WAS 10 TODAY!! HE WOKE UP TO A BRITISH BREAKFEST (EGG, PANCAKE, SAUSAGE AND BACON, SYREP) TODAY HIS MUM PROMISED TO TAKE HIM TO THE ZOO. BUT FIRST HE HAD TO UNWRAP HIS PRESENT. HE WAS DELIGHTED TO FIND A BYCECLE.

 

 AT THE ZOO THERE WAS A NEW BABY GORILLA. IT WAS PINK MICHEAL LAUGHED WITH JOY. AND FOR THE GRAND FANALLI OF HIS BIRTHDAY WHEN HE WHENT HOME HE FOUND ALL OF HIS FREINDS THEY HAD A GREAT PARTY AND CAKE AND AFTER HE EVEN HAD A AWSOME SLEEP OVER.   
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2 comments:

  1. Unknown31 January 2014 at 10:30

    Well done for including all of the five words Antoine. Next time consider where to place commas within your sentences.

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  2. Anonymous8 February 2014 at 17:21

    This sounds like a wonderful birthday. You did an excellent job using the special words. I would also remind you to be careful with your punctuation placement.
    Mrs. Vreeland@ Team 100 NJ USA

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