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Friday 24 January 2014

The Old Shed by Millie S


In an in abandoned old house children went to play in,
There lived a creepy monster who loved slaying,
If you dared to sneak inside the house,
He’d eat you up like a cat with a mouse!
He’d hide in the shed,
He’d fill you with dread,
He’ll gobble you up,
And put your eyeballs in a cup,
Twisted bones and bent back,
His hair black as black,
Trimmed of his baby fat,
Evil as one thousand rats,
Big as a bear,
He’ll give you quite a scare!
So if you ever see that shed you’d better hide under your bed!

2 comments:

  1. Excellent use of rhyme and similes Millie. Very interesting to use your words in a poem - very creative.

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  2. Hello Millie,
    What a fun poem! You have successfully described an old shed as the house of a scary monster. Good work. I especially enjoyed the part about him eating you up like a cat and a mouse, and the part about putting your eyeballs in a cup. It was easy to see to images in my mind.
    I hope you continue to post to 100WC.

    Barbara McFall (Team 100WC)
    Teacher at The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA

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