The grand gorilla
One sunny day a famous show man called George the gorilla was getting ready to go on
tour, when without warning he unassumingly came across a pink biycle “What a wonderful bike,” laughed George, “it must be from a generous fan...” but before George
could finish, in came the most grand stylists
ready to get george ready. However what George and no-one else knew was that
they weren’t stylists!! They were from George’s fan club, this time they were
sent by George’s arch-rival Lord evil,
lord evil was like george a show man ‘till george was in the spot light.
“George!” cried one of the fans, “quickly escape on the bike he will kill
you!!”
No sooner than said, George was cycling in the sun never
too be see again.
Well done Jafna, a clever way to include the 5 words. Good control of punctuation including speech.
ReplyDeleteNext time start a new line when a new character talks.
ReplyDeleteOne sunny day a famous show man called George the gorilla was getting ready to go on tour, when without warning he unassumingly came across a pink biycle “What a wonderful bike,” laughed George, “it must be from a generous fan...” but before George could finish, in came the most grand stylists,trying to get george ready. However what George and no-one else knew was that they weren’t stylists!! They were from George’s fan club, this time they were sent by George’s arch-rival Lord evil, lord evil was like george a show man ‘till george was in the spot light. “George!” cried one of the fans, “quickly escape on the bike or he'll kill you!!”
No sooner than said, George was cycling in the sun never too be seen again.
One sunny day a famous show man called George the gorilla was getting ready to go on tour, when without warning he unassumingly came across a pink biycle “What a wonderful bike,” laughed George, “it must be from a generous fan...” but before George could finish, in came the most grand stylists ready to get george ready. However what George and no-one else knew was that they weren’t stylists!! They were cloned from George’s fan club, and were sent by George’s arch-rival Lord evil.lord evil was like george a show man ‘till george was in the spot light.everyone thougt george was great “George!” cried one of the fans, “quickly escape on the bike he will kill you!!” George under stood striaght away who was being talked about so
ReplyDeleteNo sooner than said, George was cycling in the sun never too be see again. BY JAFNA