My name is Kayley,
and I had an astonishing apartment, with a leopard print carpet, a beautiful
view and slide doors. I was walking down the beautiful streets of ORPINGTON.
With my one of a kind award winning pup, her name is Pooboo. And she likes sleeping
in my purse. As I looked out the window of an old rusty shed I saw the
reflection of my apartment wrecking ball. THEY WERE KNOCKING DOWN MY
APARTMENT.I screamed in horror. Pooboo woke up from her nap. I guess I better
move to Birmingham with my parents I have nothing to pack so I better start
walking. The end
Good word choices to describe your apartment Mary, lovely idea to include you seeing a reflection in your story just like the reflection in the picture prompt.
ReplyDeleteHi there, Mary,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great piece of writing - it left me wanting to know more about Kayley and her lifestyle - she sounded a bit like a celebrity. (Like Ashley and Pudsey!)
I wonder also what kind of mistake could have caused your apartment to be demolished... I also like the way you used the reflection that was visible in the prompt.
Well done, keep up the good work,
Mrs Radd (Team100WC) Northamptonshire, England.
Hi there, Mary,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great piece of writing - it left me wanting to know more about Kayley and her lifestyle - she sounded a bit like a celebrity. (Like Ashley and Pudsey!)
I wonder also what kind of mistake could have caused your apartment to be demolished... I also like the way you used the reflection that was visible in the prompt.
Well done, keep up the good work,
Mrs Radd (Team100WC) Northamptonshire, England.