The grand zoo
I was so excited today; we were going to the zoo (I can’t
wait1) My favourite animal, which I desperately want to see, is the gorilla. Once we
had arrived I was insanely determined to see the gorillas. As we were walking
through we saw a girl on a pink
bicycle brutally bashed into the wall her, what we thought to be her
sister laughed hysterically. Finally we reached the
gorilla enclosure how funny they were with their flat noses and gruff snorts,
how I long to touch there soft fur. However I was as just as happy watching
them play together.
Some great word choices Heather. Just checked the tense though as you have mixed up past and present tenses.
ReplyDeleteThe grand zoo
ReplyDeleteI was so excited today; we were going to the zoo (I couldn't wait1) My favourite animal, which I desperately wanted to see, is the gorilla. Once we had arrived I was insanely determined to see the gorillas. As we were walking through we saw a girl on a pink bicycle brutally bashed into the wall, what we thought to be her sister laughed hysterically. Finally we reached the gorilla enclosure how funny they were with their flat noses and gruff snorts, how I long to touch there soft fur. However I was as just as happy watching them play together.