The best day out!
One splendid
blistering day there lived a little princess who knew how to rock!! All she
wanted was to get out and see the marvellous world. “huhhh but mum i
really want to go out and see the
dazziling world out there,with my own eye’s!”
“NO that is
my final answer, and stop murmuring you are a princess.”
“fine, i
won’t stop beggimg you...plzzzzzzz plz plz plz!!!”
“ok now go
and your pink
grand dress”
“hhhuu
really”
“yes”
“YEAH! I’ll
go and get my pet gorilla and bycical”!
The end!
A good start Mayeda and your punctuation is improving. Remember eyes does not need an apostrophe.
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