The circus
One day at
the noisy circus there was a grand pink gorilla on
a bicycle, the crowd was laughing heavily at him. Because he kept snapping
the bike and the seat kept disappearing! So he climbed up to a massive
tightrope with a pool of sharks, piranhas, stingrays, giant crabs and water
snakes! The dare devil wouldn’t back down, so he darted up there. Slowly and
steadily, the pink gorilla was walking across the tightrope, and he was so
close to getting across we slipped a fell in the pool, and sadly faded away!
The End.
What a sad ending boys. Good control throughout though and a clever way to include the 5 words. Next week could you include a complex sentence?
ReplyDeleteOh poor gorilla! I liked the gorilla in your story. He sounded fun and entertaining - especially as he was pink! What a shame he died in such a sad way. Great story this week boys. I also like how you began one of your sentences with the adverbs, 'slowly and steadily'.
ReplyDeleteOne day at the noisy circus there was a grand pink gorilla on a bicycle, the crowd was laughing heavily at him. Because he kept snapping the bike and the seat kept disappearing! So he climbed up to a massive tightrope with a pool of sharks, piranhas, stingrays, giant crabs and water snakes! The dare devil wouldn’t back down, so he darted up there. Slowly and steadily, the pink gorilla was walking across the tightrope, and he was so close to getting across we slipped a fell in the pool, and sadly faded away! The End.
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