Zoo Mayhem
One foggy morning, I
immediately got up for a trip to the zoo with my superb granddad, Dave we
didn’t have far to go so we took are bicycles instead off the car. When we got there it was jam packed
with people because there was a rare mountain Gorilla that poaches keep killing for a laugh.
Finally when we got in someone tripped me over and I fell in the pink gorilla habitat, it hurt
when I fell but I just remembered that I had blueberries in my pocket I thought
that I was going to die but before the gorilla got me the zookeeper saved me I
will always be in his debt!
Some great word choices James. Excellent controlled punctuation at the start, but you end up with a very long sentence. Also...
ReplyDeleteare or our?
off or of