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Friday, 31 January 2014

pink gorilla by Mary


Pink gorilla

 Dear diary

Remember yesterday when I told you that I saw a pink gorilla at the park? I still haven’t told anyone yet, I’m scared they won`t believe me  it’s been running through my mind all night. What if it tries to hurt someone and why is it pink? I’m so confused.  I`ll tell my sister she might believe me.

Anxiously I crept down the crackly stairs stacking as I got to the last; step to find my lazy sister laying on the couch like a monkey after eating 50 bananas. I said Lola can you take to the park please I saw a pink gorilla. (giggles) there’s no such thing a pink gorilla and no I cant take to the park in tired she said.  I had to think of a plan to make her take me then I thought of a great idea. There’s a grand opening shoes sale at the park I said go get you bicycle were going to the park.   THE END   (The gorilla was just a girl in a costume)
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  1. Unknown31 January 2014 at 10:07

    Some wonderful sentences Mary, especially your questions to your diary.

    To improve ensure you write in the same tense - in this case the past tense. Also read your own writing before posting. You have missed words and commas would help me to read your writing. Speech marks would also help.

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  2. Anonymous3 February 2014 at 07:08

    Pink gorilla


    Dear diary


    Remember yesterday when I told you that I saw a pink gorilla at the park? I still haven’t told anyone yet, I’m scared they won`t believe me! it’s been running through my mind all night. What if it tries to hurt someone and why is it pink? I’m so confused. I`ll tell my sister she might believe me.


    Anxiously I crept down the creakey stairs, tripping as I got to the last step to find my lazy sister laying on the couch like a monkey after eating 50 bananas. I said "Lola can you take to the park please, I saw a pink gorilla!"
    She giggled " There’s no such thing as a pink gorilla and no I can`t take to the park I`m tired . I had to think of a plan to make her take me. Then I thought of a great idea! "There’s a grand opening shoes sale at the park" I said.
    go get you`r bicycle she said were going to the park. THE END (The gorilla was just a girl in a costume)

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