Pink gorilla
Dear
diary
Remember yesterday when I told you that
I saw a pink gorilla at
the park? I still haven’t told anyone yet, I’m scared they won`t believe
me it’s been running through my mind all
night. What if it tries to hurt someone and why is it pink? I’m so
confused. I`ll tell my sister she might
believe me.
Anxiously I crept down the crackly
stairs stacking as I got to the last; step to find my lazy sister laying on the
couch like a monkey after eating 50 bananas. I said Lola can you take to the
park please I saw a pink gorilla. (giggles) there’s no such thing a pink
gorilla and no I cant take to the park in tired she said. I had to think of a plan to make her take
me then I thought of a great idea. There’s a grand opening shoes sale at the park I said go get
you bicycle were going
to the park. THE END (The gorilla was just a girl in a costume)
Some wonderful sentences Mary, especially your questions to your diary.
ReplyDeleteTo improve ensure you write in the same tense - in this case the past tense. Also read your own writing before posting. You have missed words and commas would help me to read your writing. Speech marks would also help.
Pink gorilla
ReplyDeleteDear diary
Remember yesterday when I told you that I saw a pink gorilla at the park? I still haven’t told anyone yet, I’m scared they won`t believe me! it’s been running through my mind all night. What if it tries to hurt someone and why is it pink? I’m so confused. I`ll tell my sister she might believe me.
Anxiously I crept down the creakey stairs, tripping as I got to the last step to find my lazy sister laying on the couch like a monkey after eating 50 bananas. I said "Lola can you take to the park please, I saw a pink gorilla!"
She giggled " There’s no such thing as a pink gorilla and no I can`t take to the park I`m tired . I had to think of a plan to make her take me. Then I thought of a great idea! "There’s a grand opening shoes sale at the park" I said.
go get you`r bicycle she said were going to the park. THE END (The gorilla was just a girl in a costume)