One scorching summer hot day, there was a boy named Bart and
he was playing with his brother. His brother was on a bicycle out in the garden, DING DONG!!! Bart
sprinted to the door with lightning speed, and there was a tall figure hold a
game like parcel.
The figure laughed
and said “er’e you go mate.” Bart showed his Mum and Dad immediately with joy.”
go and play on your ps3”remarked dad.” be a good boy,” replied mum.
Unbelievably, he turned on the ps3. A mysterious painful noise, then out came
the grand pink gorilla
it was a shocking view, for him.
Well done boys, I was a little confused at the end though. Did the gorilla come out of the PS3?
ReplyDeleteHi Tareeq and Josh
ReplyDeleteYou've written a good 100 word challenge this week with some great descriptive vocabulary and powerful verbs. I particularly like 'Bart sprinted to the door with lightening speed' Some good sentence starters too. Remember that the first word in direct speech always has a capital letter. Keep it up!
Oh, and be careful when you link your piece to the 100WC website next time. This was a little difficult to find.
Hi Tareeq and Josh
ReplyDeleteYou've written a good 100 word challenge this week with some great descriptive vocabulary and powerful verbs. I particularly like 'Bart sprinted to the door with lightening speed' Some good sentence starters too. Remember that the first word in direct speech always has a capital letter. Keep it up!
Oh, and be careful when you link your piece to the 100WC website next time. This was a little difficult to find.