One
misty morning, it was the day my friend and I got up out of bed to eat our
breakfast. So after a delicious feast, we got ourselves dressed. We trekked
down to the shed to collect our scooters. We swept through the murky cobwebs
and discovered a huge pair of pink trainers with go fast stripes on them. So we
thought whose could those be? So we quickly carried on getting our scooters and
immediately got out of the shed.
Great describing words Harry. I especially liked 'trekked and swept' I wonder who the shoes belonged to. Were there any other clues?
ReplyDeleteHello Harry,
ReplyDeleteI also wondered whose shoes they were. You have tried hard to start your sentences in different ways. I have noticed, however, you have used the word 'so' on several occasions. Perhaps you could think of some different connectives to start your sentences.
Keep writing.
Ms R. Orr
Head Teacher
Team100
One misty morning, it was the day my friend and I got up out of bed to eat our breakfast. So after a delicious feast, we got ourselves dressed. We trekked down to the shed to collect our scooters. We swept through the murky cobwebs and discovered a huge pair of pink trainers with go fast stripes on them. So we thought whose could those be? So we quickly carried on getting our scooters and immediately got out of the shed.
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